Luu Dal'Liin (Zemmitry)

[Luu Dal'Liin]

SL Username: Zemmitry

SL Display Name: Luu Dal'Liin

SL Join Date: 2-12-13

Character Name: Luu Dal'Liin

Character Age: 126 (In dog years), 18 (In human years)

Character Species: Wolf

Character Gender: Female

Character Position: Awaiting for position.

Short Character Background:
She was born and raised, in the Bentham Forest(An actual place in SL). She was tought through out her childhood, on how to interact with other species in a good way. Though, her mother tought her everything she needs to know, like basic knowledge, how to speak human words, that sort of thing. But when she was 7(Human years), her village was brutally destoryed. Upon her travels, seeing her entire family was murdered, she came upon a unknown pack. They teached her everything from combat, to simple meditation.

Her personality, is frowned upon by some, not most. She has tendency to be a 'Smarty Pants', though theres a problem with that. She can pick up certain traits no one else can, just by the words the person speaks. Why its frowned upon is, actually obvious. No one wants secrets to be known of, which is understandable, but for her, she will simply tilt her head curious of why hide that certain thing.

Her style of dressing is of questioning to some..Or actually most. She loves to dress in heavy based clothing because of her soft fur. She believes the heavy clothing helps protect her fur from dust, and things that cause dirtyness to her fur. Whats weird is, she only wears heavy styling of pants. Some questions that are asked of her clothing is, Are they hard to move around in? The answer to that is, no. Shes worn clothing like that since birth, so shes learned to deal with that.

*NOTE: The Bentham Forest is a VERY scary place, so she can also be fearless as well.

Character Special Abilities:
Her abilities deal with sound its self:

Sound Symphany: When this ability is triggered, sound waves go through the ground and disrupt certain things like, a persons mind setting, cause cracks in the ground(depending how mad she is), and fracture bones if a bare foot or paw is touching the ground. The main use for this ability is simple, defence. She is only able to use this if her attacker uses physical combat. This ability, in more detail, can literly be heard. It will sound like a bell of a church. Once it enters the ground, it will travel at the speed of sound but only a VERY short distance before it has no affect. Distance wise, the attacker has to be with in arms reach for it to work. With in arms reach, this ability is VERY affective, causing ONLY bleeding of the blood vessels. If the attacker is really close, with in elbows reach, the ability can cause disruption of the bodies natural function, meaning it can cause internal bleeding of the stomache, and blood vessels. Distance plays a major factor for this ability, the closer her attacker is the more damage her attacker suffers. And seeing this ability is so devistating, she is only able to use it ONCE in a day.

Sound Corruption: If this ability is said, yes said, a very high pitched sound rings off her top fangs. These sound can cause the ears to bleed, and make the target become deaf for a moment. In more detail, for this ability to be used her 'Sound Symphany', needs to be in affect on the attacker. In a fight or spar, it can only be used ONCE, sadly. The sound this make's, it will first come out as a normal bark, then it will end with a click, Like lightening striking a metal pole. The click is what makes the ears bleed. The bleeding of the ears isnt massive or anything, just enough to make a blood drop hit the shoulder or ground. The deafness WILL cause movement to be slowed MAJORLY if aimmed directly at the ear. The way to dodge this is simple, MOVE! The attackers ears will still bleed, but no deafness will happen. The range of this ability goes on untill it hits a solid object.

Sound Deselation: If this ability is said, yes said, a very high pitched sound rings off her bottom fangs. These sound can cause internal bleeding from blood vessels breaking. In detail, this ability can be used many times in a fight or spar. The catch of this ability is nothing major, just soreness of her teeth. This ability is her MAIN ability, meaning there is only one limitation of this ability, and again, soreness of her teeth. The more she uses it, the more sore she becomes. If used enough, she will simply stop in her tracks and fall asleep from exhaustion of her jaws. (Meaning 3 or 4 posts from her)

*NOTE: Her abilities can stack, but it will add to the catches, meaning more damage of herself.

Character Special Weaknesses:
Her weaknesses deal with certain spots on her body, along with some catches (C/) for her abilities:

Behind her ears: If they were touched, she cringes in pleasure. To be more discriptive, behind her ears, lies a bald spot. That bald spot is so sencitive, the tinyest little touch of it will cause her great pleasure. Once touched, she will literly sit on her hinde legs and let the person pet her. If her ears are touched for a certain period of time, she will either fall asleep or become 'Heated'.

The base of her tail: If it were to be touched, she could easily fall for the person doing it or possibly do anything for the person. And by the base of her tail, it means the under side of her tail. Seeing she is a wolf, the person touching the area will most likely be liked alot by her. It's basicly the best way to get on her good side.

Her left thigh (Not right): If that area were to be touched, she would blush, and possibly drool if any other spot is touched with her thigh, and instantly fall to her knees, completly drunk with lust. And by thigh, it means the inner thigh of her leg. This area is just as sencitive as behind her ears, but there is a twist...If, and only if, and thats a BIG if, this area is touched, her eyes will turn pink.

C/ Sound Symphony: It can also cause her to fall over, plus the fact she doesnt wear shoes or paw gear, this ability can also damage her as well.

C/ Sound Corruption and Deselation: After the abilities are triggered, her teeth can become sore or bleed.

*NOTE: She is very corrupteble if those areas are touched. She can either enjoy them, or rarely bite the crud out the person. She will NEVER use her abilities unless nessecary.

[Matsuri Yoshikawa]

The character is 18.  Please read the rules carefully.  All characters are at least 18.  Also 18 in human years would be 126 in dog years.  "Dog years" usually multiplies by 7, not that there is anything actually scientific about that.

Once you fix that we'll discuss the powers

[Luu Dal'Liin]

Sorry ._.; I used an internet source for the age in dog years. And if it seems short, I simply wanted to keep it 'Short, sweet, and simple.'

[Matsuri Yoshikawa]

Okay, now we've got the age thing figure out.  As for the powers.  They need limitation, and further detail.  There needs to be a range, a specific times per day use, required number of posts before use.  Basically there needs to be a way for other characters to have a chance to dodge.  The sound symphony specifically needs a LOT more detail.  "Disrupt certain things" is way too general.  Specifically what does the power do?  What are its limitations?

[Luu Dal'Liin]

Oooo'kay...I think I got it as detailed as I can, because I think if go into further detail, I might keep repeating the same thing over and over again @~@

[Luu Dal'Liin]

Ok. NOW its detailed as best as I can get it. And umm...May I have another admin look at it as well? For more tips or hopeful aprovel?

[Matsuri Yoshikawa]

This is significantly better, but how many times per day can the sound symphony be used?  It seems like a pretty devastating attack at close range with no real way to block it, so seems to me it should only be usable once per day, or we can make it twice per day, but the second use means she can not use any of her other powers for the rest of the day.

[Luu Dal'Liin]

If she were to use Sound Symphany twice, she would lose both her legs, and possibly lose her life from blood loss. So yes, it can only be used once in a day

[Matsuri Yoshikawa]

All righty, just modify the OP to say that attack is a one time a day, and then I'd say this is approved, and then we'll have another admin take a look at it.   Also just so you know, you are already free to come and RP at the sim all you want, you just can't use the character's super powers until they are approved.

[Luu Dal'Liin]

Done. ^u^ I only had to add one sentance. :l

[Matsuri Yoshikawa]

Okay, it is fine now.  Just need another admin to take a look.

[Rachael Maurer]

Matsuri got all my concerns. Approved.

[Luu Dal'Liin]

Sweet. T'ank you.